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Things were not going well, Chris thought. Not only had this prospective hire still not yet told him her name, she’d also managed to get the attention of everyone in the bar. Chris could hear Hector’s stifled laughter even above all of her wailings about what some hypothetical version of Chris would do to her, all the while Chris really needed her to do literally anything else. “Nobody’s drowning anybody,” Chris said. “Here, here’s how you can be useful." He pulled out the ring he’d gotten from the dungeon. “Do you know what this is?” She stared at it a moment. “That is… a ring.” She realized what Chris meant before he could clarify himself, and Chris immediately wished he’d gotten there faster as the woman immediately went back into wail mode and cried, “Oh, oh I'm such a fool, a foolish fool who only does foolish things! B-but if you don't mind a fool handling your things I can… identify it. I can wear gloves if you don't want my foolish germs touching it!” "Why would- I don't think you'd have to use gloves, but you will have to pull yourself together a little bit," Chris said, but he still offered the ring. “Th-this is pulled together!” was not exactly convincing, but the woman did take the ring and do a little magic spell with it. Chris couldn’t tell what was going on, but also she didn’t seem to be threatening him with it (did she even have the capacity to threaten anything?), so he let the magic happen. When it subsided, she even had an answer to his actual question. The ring was a locator. If it had someone’s blood in it -- three someone’s even -- the wearer could tell where they were. “Probably,” the mage said. Ah, well, it was a first step. “See?” Chris said, making one final attempt at being encouraging. “That’s what you’re getting paid for here. That and the actual docks job. Come on. I want to get there while there’s still light so we can get a lay of the land- sea, whatever.”

I like it, for what it is, but it's so repetitive. It does its job as what it's meant to be but...wouldn't go out of my way to listen, 6.5/10